Sunday, February 21, 2010

3rd poem

Her hair isn't as br    own as the earth. Li    ps aren't as red as    
a rose. Legs aren't as long as the Nile. Skin isn't as bronz
e as a goddess Stoma ch isn't as flat as the plains of Ecuado
r, it has more of a round shape like the hills of Ireland. V
irginity isn't one o f the Virgin Mothers ; hell it isn't even
like Madonna's. Eye s aren't as wide as a puppies, in honest
y one's lazier than a couch potato. Stil l, in no way shape o
r form would I chang e anything about her . Her imperfections
are perfect to me. F laws are invisible t o my heart, she smil
es them off with her pearly whites. A si ngle smirk that can
make any man crumble to his knees. When they do; they get a
perfect glance of he r apple bottom. Yet, her outside doesn't
compare to her in. A heart that can riv al one of a loving c
aring mother's. She bleeds generosity, s he speaks honesty. S
he loves uncondition ally, she cares undo ubtedly. Yes, I know
she may be imperfec t, but shes perfect for me.


-I saw this slice and dice activity on the link the professor gave us, so I used it for a poem I once wrote to a girl a while ago. You literally have
to read it left to right, some of the words are spilt up.

3 comments:

  1. In addition to your strange structure you have some spelling mistakes like "irginity,"isne,"heares," and etc. I would only urge you to do a thorough proofreading before changing your writing into more dramatic forms like above.

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  2. its not misspelled it wasnt able to copy and paste it correctly on this page because it was too wide some letters are cut off 1 column and go onto another even though its one word.

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